Lord of Secrets

This is the first time I tried to write like this, and I found many shortcomings.

One point is that the plot unfolds a little too fast, and some additional stories should be interspersed during the period, so that the description of the world will be more profound. But because of Ubermo's "peeping" ability, he will keep staring at Deil. He will definitely not continue like this for too long. Therefore, he will not ignore this matter as if it has never happened. He will slowly encounter events like a normal person, gradually develop, and finally explode.

This is a failure. He should not have known the clue of "ghost domain" at that time, which led to the hasty end of the plot. But in a way, it is inevitable that he knows. Buches is to steal the divinity of the god of death, and it is impossible for the god of death to really come, so she will reveal this intentionally or unintentionally, but she cannot reveal too much. Lightman is the victim. Of course, the unconscious power of the god of death is sleeping, causing Ubermo to glimpse a corner of the star sea, so the unconscious power of the god of death will interfere with it, so that Ubermo ignores this point.

Second, for Marcia and others, since there are no daily or other plots, I feel that their description is too one-sided, and the characterization is not so profound and full.

Originally, this volume was called "Glory", but later I changed it to "Flame". I think Ubemo is just a flame now, and the people in this world are just flames.

Everyone is struggling to make the flames more brilliant, but the reality is that maybe the wind blows and the flames will go out.

So Samovi died, Marcia, Kahn, Meina and Lal, and others died. But the shortcoming is what I said before, because the description of them is too simple, just following Ubemo's sight, resulting in the lack of this part of emotion, and it is impossible to really experience that kind of struggle.

And "Flame" also corresponds to the fire when Medley was promoted to the fate 4 disaster priest, and it also implies Ubemo's anger. But I feel that the description of Ubemo's emotions is not delicate enough, because the development is too fast, there is too little interaction with other characters, and the emotions between them are not so natural. It is more like the roar of an emperor who cannot protect his people. This is also a mistake. In fact, I still want to write about the emotions between those people.

The second volume plans to move to the southern continent and add some elements. This is implicitly mentioned in the first volume. I hope that the second volume can play better, and at the same time increase the description of various characters, reflecting their growth and character image, so that it is not so empty (that is, water). The second volume is called "Fireworks".

ps: For some book friends' questions, sometimes I will pretend not to see it, because it will spoil the spoilers if I say it.