My Daily Life with Gosara Ayase/my Sister Can't Be Ayase's Little Angel

Ayase nodded, looking in a good mood, the two tidied up and went into the house.

The room suddenly became cooler, watching Ayase walk towards the bathroom, Ryunosuke did not follow.

Looking at Ayase's back, Ryunosuke swallowed, the girl is really the best existence in the world.

Chapter 68 Lime Soda, The Taste of Summer

After Ayase and Ryunosuke finished pulling out the miscellaneous weeds in the garden, it was already morning, and the sun was already in the sky.

Although he didn't sleep for a long time last night, and although he pulled the grass all morning, Ryunosuke is not sleepy at all now.

He was sitting on a chair next to the computer desk in the room, eating a candy in his mouth.

What are you doing now?

Just give Black Cat a little opinion and say something about it.

In fact, when he read it yesterday, he was already revising it.It's just small problems like typos and word order.

As for the more advanced ones, such as what would be better if the plot was modified, and how to make the character's personality more distinct.

There are also some more mysterious things, such as the sense of rhythm, the control of the plot, the ability to mobilize the reader's emotions,

He didn't comment on any of these, not because he wanted to hide his clumsiness, but because he had to read the full text before he could comment.

Otherwise, it is almost the same as nonsense, and it is normal operation to express opinions after reading.

This is what is to be done now, Ryunosuke thought about his words, and tried to give Black Cat his opinion as tactfully as possible.

First praise, then talk about the shortcomings, and then praise again.

This "sandwich" method was learned by Ryunosuke from the Internet, but I don't know if it works.

But he believed that the black cat would understand him, because she was a smart person.

Even if the black cat sees through her tricks, she will definitely accept feasible opinions seriously, and regard his methods as a kind of love and care for her.

So it's better to see through it, to flirt with girls invisible.

Comments are not at the end of the full text, but there are places where comments can be made everywhere in the full text.

The black cat has at least 10 words, so this matter is actually not simple.

When he read it for the first time, he roughly marked the problematic places. This time, he just found these places and explained them in detail.

Delete part of the suggestion that I wrote based on the first impression, because he got it wrong.

Praise in some places, because it is really well written.

Some are supplementary explanations and put forward the second possibility.

some

At noon, Ayase called him to have a meal, and he came back to continue modifying the black cat after eating.

This is different from writing by yourself, it will not make people more and more excited.

Instead, it will give people a sense of boredom, irritability, and a little sleepiness.

Thinking about it this way, editing is actually quite hard.

so what.

He changed to a little sleepy in the middle, so he was going to go to bed and lie down for a while, and then do the rest in the afternoon.

Of course, it may also be that I just had a full meal and was a little sleepy, plus the weather was extremely hot, and I didn't sleep well last night.

In short, Ryunosuke went to bed, pulled the quilt over his stomach, and left the rest uncovered.

He fell asleep quickly.

The sun is gliding from east to west, and the temperature is getting higher and higher.

Ryunosuke used to think that twelve o'clock was the hottest, but later he learned that the hottest time of the day in summer is one or two o'clock in the afternoon.

After one o'clock in the afternoon, the cicadas sang louder.

Even if Ryunosuke only covered his stomach, he felt too hot.

Ryunosuke opened his sleeping eyes and touched his head, sweating a little.

He lifted the quilt and took a long breath.

Listening to the noisy cicadas, he lay on the bed for a while before sitting up and regaining consciousness.

Turning over and getting out of bed, I feel that my back is a little wet, which is not very refreshing.

Looking at the fan in the room, Ryunosuke sighed: "It seems that it's time to use it."

Adjust to a low wind speed, not blowing at people.

He and Ayase's room didn't have air-conditioning, and the whole house was heated in winter, so there was no need for air-conditioning.

In summer, there is an air conditioner in the living room, and there is only an electric fan in the room.

It's not that I can't afford to install an air conditioner, but because of health considerations.

Sweating a little in summer is good for your health, if there is an air conditioner.baby net om