Rebirth, Starting from 2005

Chapter 20 Could it be that this is the real strong man?

In addition to some unnecessary descriptions of the environment, Yan Xin also pointed out a few minor problems in this chapter.

For example, the villain's taunting of the protagonist is too tactful, and sometimes you need to think about it to understand what you mean, which is not conducive to stimulating emotions.

The sarcasm could have been more direct.

There is also the face of a villain who pushes high and tramples low, which is more obvious.

"This...is it a little unreasonable?" Chen Li hesitated, "Even if the protagonist is useless, he is still the son of the patriarch. People in the family have said too much, don't you have to worry about being put on by the patriarch?"

Although he was young, he was someone who had been working for a few months, so he knew a little bit about the world.

"So, that's why you rushed to the street," Yan Xin said, "You think too much, and if you are too thoughtful, you will lose that breath, and you won't be able to arouse emotions, and you won't be able to resonate with readers."

"Is...is it?" Chen Li became unconfident in himself.

Yan Xinyu said to him earnestly: "The selling point of this book is the passion, that is, you will trample all those who looked down on you under your feet, and blow the heads of all the enemies to pieces. If the hatred can't be suppressed, the pleasure of slapping the face will be gone. , the whole book has no such taste.”

"What you said is reasonable..." Chen Li said.

He asked again: "But I really don't talk about the logic in reality, is that okay?"

"There's no need to be so cautious," Yan Xin said. "This book pursues youthful enthusiasm, which means that most of the audience are middle school students. They are the age that defies all rules. Why would they care about this? As long as it's cool enough That's it!"

Chen Li was persuaded by him, and said, "Then I'll change it!"

According to Yan Xin's opinion, it has been revised again.

Yan Xin saw that he was still thinking about his words, and sometimes twisted and changed them for a word, and said:

"You don't have to, you don't need to drag the text, as long as you can express yourself, don't show off your vocabulary, this is not a place worth wasting time. If you can express it simply, don't go around. You can Don't use uncommon words to express with common words."

Chen Li felt a little embarrassed: "I want to give readers a feeling that I am very cultured..."

"It's not necessary," Yan Xin said, "it's like cooking. The story is the ingredients, the rhythm is the heat, and the writing is just the seasoning. It's okay to add a little seasoning, but you can't let the taste of the seasoning cover the ingredients. The taste, this is no distinction between priority and secondary. And the main audience of your novel is middle school students, what do you do to show off your vocabulary? Do you still expect a group of people to read your novel while looking up the dictionary? How tiring ah!"

The more Chen Li thought about it, the more reasonable he felt: "You're right, it's my fault, and I want to correct it."

Yan Xin was very relieved, and patted him on the shoulder: "Just figure it out. Wenqing is a disease, and web writers must not catch it."

Chen Li looked at Yan Xin and felt a strange feeling in his heart:

"Although this person is younger than me, when he talks to me, I always feel that an experienced elder is educating me-how does he understand so much?"

"Could it be that this is the real strong man?"

Yan Xin felt a little creepy when he saw it, so he gave a dry laugh and said, "Well, you can continue to modify it. I'll take a look at it later, and post it if I think it's appropriate."

Before leaving, I did not forget to encourage Chen Li:

"Actually, you have already written this very well, so you should have good results if you just send it out, but I think you can do better, so the requirements will be higher. This is the first project we have cooperated with, so we must It was an instant hit."

After going outside for another twenty minutes of fresh air, I went in.

At this time, Chen Li has finished editing the first chapter, and is now looking for typos.

Yan Xin also followed to watch.

This time, the feelings that made him unhappy are gone, there is no redundant description, and the hatred is full.

Chen Li's writing ability is still there.

According to his self-introduction, he started to learn to write novels when he was in high school. After graduating from high school, he did not go out to work immediately. Instead, he wrote novels at home for more than a year, contributed to some literary journals, and published several short stories during the period. Added up, I earned more than 2,000 yuan in royalties.

It was also at that time that I wrote an online novel. During the serialization period, I received dozens of dollars in rewards, but the minimum standard for cash withdrawals could not be met, so I had to give up in the end.

It's not that he has strong writing skills, but he has reached a qualified level.

The disadvantage is that I read too many martial arts novels before, and I was affected by the world view of those martial arts novels. The plot is old-fashioned and I can't write new ideas.

Man is a young man, but his consciousness is in an outdated worldview.

In addition, I still have a little bit of literary youth, and I want to show my literary talent, to show that I am different from ordinary Internet authors, and have more depth to them.

This kind of thinking makes his novels particularly twisted and cannot attract audiences.

Now after Yan Xin's guidance, I know how to write a good online novel, give up those superfluous ideas, and the text suddenly becomes smooth.

Yan Xin has read so many online novels in his previous life, and knows that the most suitable style of writing for online novels is the kind that makes people not realize that there is a style of writing. Only the plot of the story, the emotions and emotions of the characters can stay in the reader's heart.

Now, at least for this first chapter, Chen Li did it.

As a person involved, he cannot objectively evaluate which one is better, the first chapter or the first chapter of the original book, but he can tell that this is an excellent beginning.

"what do you think?"

After Yan Xin finished reading, Chen Li asked a little nervously.

Now when he faced Yan Xin, he felt a sense of awe inexplicably.

He feels that this young man is someone who understands web literature, and is much better than himself in web literature.

The teenager's opinion matters.

Yan Xin gave him a thumbs up: "At the beginning, at least one masterpiece is indispensable. The future chapters can stabilize the level of this chapter, and there will be a place for you in the shrine of the web."

Chen Li felt relieved.

This evaluation was so high that it even made him feel dizzy with happiness.

Said: "Then, just send it?"

"Send it!" Yan Xin said affirmatively.

Chen Li moved the mouse to the post, and looked at Yan Xin on the right side: "It's really posted?"

Yan Xin: "Send!"

Click the mouse to publish.

Yan Xin checked the time, it was 2:24 am on August 12, 2005.

He said to Chen Li:

"You have to remember this time, this time represents an important milestone for the web."

Chen Li laughed dryly: "It's not that exaggerated, is it?"

"It's such an exaggeration!" Yan Xin said affirmatively.