[Three Days, One Issue] Little Date's Flower

I love them! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

Since I entered the pit and participated in the first article of Hezhi, I really like these two strikes, so every time I write a paragraph, I have to doubt whether I have expressed the desired effect or not, and whether I have excessive OOC, and then run to the main editor to urge Xiao My sister confirmed it [-] times (laughs); the typesetting was also revised for several days, and in the end I was too embarrassed to even click on my wife’s small window, so I had to plop on my knees and confess that I love you without saying a word. ←The next sentence was answered in seconds, "I don't love you..." ← But I still have to say "I'm sorry, but I still love you [Bixin.gif]" ← Now the memories can't help but shed their morals while laughing tears.

However, even with the best efforts to improve it, this article still has many, many shortcomings.

First, about character setting.

From the very beginning, the theme of "salvation" was set, and the era framing and thinking about the plot were all based on this, so the images of the elder brother and grandpa in the article deviated greatly from the game settings.I originally wanted to tell a love story with a complete karma (that is, explain why I have feelings with each other from the perspective of Erzhen, and then solve an incident that symbolizes the "flame of the Toyotomi era" to make my brother let go completely), but the writing is insufficient. Knowing how to go with the flow and make Sanming walk down from the altar (falling into the brain of love ← hello), in the end, he can only choose to cancel all the first drafts of 2w, take a shortcut and directly make him a human, and then came up with the idea of ​​Dazheng Paro . ←After becoming a human, it is natural to have emotions, and it is natural to do some impulsive things. The most difficult part of the psychological monologue can be omitted. This is also why I chose the perspective of a bystander (← I am ashamed to say! ), but when Fu Sangshen became a human being, a certain degree of OOC problem also began to exist.For example, the role of the human being in the first issue of the article.

Undoubtedly, he has a complete "Osaka memory", and at this level he corresponds to the so-called Guan Tiantian's sword, which is often referred to by colleagues as "the world shakes up"; but in fact, Mr. Yiqi's character is in After going through the fire, he became similar to Brother Honmaru, but a bit more paranoid—human beings have a stronger sense of substitution for the family, so his obsession is also stronger—that is, the assumption I have repeatedly thought about in private, and then The elder brother behind the blade can't forget the events of that year, so what if he remembers everything?

This setting is undoubtedly OOC to the limit among normal fans, but since Sanming has been dragged off the altar, I really want to make the meaning of "salvation" more profound (dangerous speech).If the grandfather of my Honmaru was the reassuring existence that made my brother realize that the times have changed and gradually no longer have nightmares, then Mikazuki-kun in this article is the sharp blade that pulled Mr. Yiqi out of the nightmare directly and made him break with the past.The emotion and meaning are the same, but the process is completely different.

Followed by narrative style and writing language.

Since the general environment of this book needs to be drawn from fairy tales, it adopts the No.1 perspective of the bystander. The narrative is modeled on the style of Mr. Liancheng Mikihiko, and the reasoning is based on romance. Therefore, the psychological activities of Sankaiyue and Yiqi did not directly appear. Completely listening to a third person tell a story. ←Before I started writing, I was always worried that many colleagues would not be used to this writing method, but in the end I decided to put all my eggs in one basket, because I really couldn’t think of a third-person grandfather’s perspective that is more suitable for this story.For the consideration of the sense of substitution, the language of the whole text deliberately refers to the literary works of the Taisho period (although I have learned four different images), and purposefully compiled the vocabulary of the Taisho style when printing and typesetting, and by annotating it The method tried to make the article look more contemporary (I don’t know if it will be effective after reading it...), so that after receiving the book, my roommate complained about the "poor Japanese translation style" OTZ

In addition to the above two points, there are many logical flaws in the article.For example, I originally wanted to express "the feeling of being unable to let go of the past", but due to IQ problems, the case of Fujiwara Mansion basically has no correspondence with history; trying to restore the feeling of Osaka Castle on the basis of reasoning, but because of IQ problems, I don't know how to handle it. More characters were put in and the brotherhood was brutally cut; the reasoning part was cut corners... ← The author's thinking ability is really weak, so when I can't move forward, I usually have to use the monkey-style mental reduction method (...) to force Skip it directly (in the original version of the event, I had taken it for granted that one of the victims (the housekeeper) fell to his death because he was too old, and was ridiculed by the roommates (…), and now the idea has really reached intelligence upper limit[/laughing and crying]), so if you feel "this operation is wrong", please ignore it secretly (where is your face)

Finally, and most importantly, the main idea of ​​the article.

Although it is used as a CP text, there are really few parts in the text that directly describe love.Rather than saying that there is a clear love direction, it is more appropriate to classify it as a fetter. ←From the point of view of romance, it is not a vigorous love. From the point of view of reasoning, it only tells a simple and clear case, but there are indeed some Nishin Toyotomi that I want to express to everyone after repeated thinking. Between Taidao has always touched me deeply.This kind of bond has also been tried to reflect it from different angles in the previous cookies. It is not limited to love. It is because of the complicated past that has formed a karma, so it cannot be easily broken or let go. It is full of positivity for the future. influence relationship. ←I can’t say it in one sentence, but it’s very beautiful and very hopeful. When I see them together, I want to smile from the bottom of my heart. ←I just want to express this feeling, even a tenth of it is fine, so I worked hard to participate in the creation.

So no matter how imperfect the story is, how many parts I am not satisfied with; if I can bring you a little surprise and touch after reading the last line, I will be really, really happy.

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