Wizards are mighty

"This foreshadowing can make high-dimensional observers wonder whether a war will really happen later and the impact of the war on the city and the protagonist."

"In addition, the description of the scene of entering the city and the conditions of the city, as well as the living conditions and population of ordinary people are also very important. These contents can enrich the world view of the story and allow high-dimensional observers to better understand the background of the city."

"However, I think we can describe the city wall in more detail, such as the material, height, facilities on the wall, etc. This will give high-dimensional observers a better sense of the picture, and the scene of entering the city can also be described in more detail. For example, the procedures for entering the city, people’s expressions and conversations will make the whole scene more vivid.”

Q version Vic described it this way, and then continued to read the following content.

"In the second half of the first main line, after entering the city, you are looking for accommodation, purchasing supplies, etc. In this process, you should write down the identity gap between professionals and ordinary people, introduce various settings, etc. (such as aristocratic power, Chamber of Commerce, prices...)"

"Well, the plot arrangements after entering the city are quite reasonable."

“Finding shelter and purchasing supplies are common but important life scenes, through which the protagonist’s adaptation process in a new environment can be shown.”

"And emphasizing the identity gap between professionals and ordinary people is a good point. This can highlight the class divisions in this world and allow high-dimensional observers to understand the social background of the story more clearly."

"It is also necessary to introduce settings such as aristocratic power, chambers of commerce, and prices. These elements can enrich the economic and political aspects of the story and make the entire world view more complete."

"However, when describing finding shelter and purchasing supplies, you can add some episodes or difficulties, such as housing being difficult to find, supplies being expensive or being in short supply, to increase interest and tension."

Q version Vic explained this.

"The second main line describes alchemy and selling, and it will be upgraded to level 4 or 5. It will last about four months. You can consider adding scenes such as night markets to increase the richness of the plot."

"Foreshadowings can be laid here, such as the old man and the little girl, etc., and the timeline is January."

"Alchemy... is pretty good."

"Upgrading the level through alchemy allows high-dimensional observers to better experience the thrill of upgrading, and the 4-month time span also gives Sean enough room for growth."

"It's a great idea to add scenes such as the night market to increase the richness of the plot. The night market is usually a place full of mystery and possibilities, and it is easy for some interesting stories to happen."

"Well... maybe we can describe the alchemy process in more detail, such as the difficulties, breakthroughs and insights the protagonist encounters during alchemy. This will allow high-dimensional observers to better understand the protagonist's growth process, etc."

Q version Vic did not stop and continued reading.

"The third main line is about researching potions and trying to buy materials, but there is a serious shortage of materials in the city. It describes the protagonist's doubts and thinking and lays the groundwork."

"This plot is very suspenseful. When researching the potion, it is found that the materials are out of stock. This is a good conflict setting, which will make the protagonist face a dilemma and promote the development of the story."

"The protagonist's doubts and thinking are also very well described, allowing high-dimensional observers to feel the protagonist's intelligence and caution."       "War and heavy snow are also very interesting as foreshadowing. These two elements are very mysterious, and high-dimensional observers will be curious. Their relationship to material shortages.”

"By the way, you can also go more in-depth when describing the protagonist's doubts. For example, let the protagonist try to think about the reasons for the shortage from different angles, or discuss with other characters. This will make the story richer."

"Then, Sean went to the Adventurer's Guild, chatted, described the environment and introduced the settings of the adventurers (population, etc. can also be introduced), released the mission, obtained news and war rumors, and went to the tavern to try his luck."

"Well, the arrangement of this plot is very coherent."

“From the Adventurer’s Guild to the tavern, advancing the story step by step, chatting in the Adventurer’s Guild and introducing relevant settings, this is a good way to introduce the adventurers of this world to high-dimensional observers, including their Population, levels, missions, etc. Getting news and war rumors after posting a mission also adds to the tension and suspense of the story.”

"Of course, you can also describe the environment of the Adventurer's Guild in more detail, such as the layout of the guild, the activities of its personnel, etc. This will give high-dimensional observers a more immersive feeling."

"After arriving at the tavern, the protagonist's pampering and youth are highlighted by describing the protagonist's fair skin and the attitude of the people in the tavern. After the protagonist takes out the gold coins, everyone shows extremely greedy."

"This description of the tavern scene can enrich the 'plot'."

"The comparison between the appearance of the protagonist and the attitudes of the people in the tavern perfectly illustrates the identity and status of the protagonist. The greed of the people in the tavern is also very real, which is in line with the weaknesses of human nature."

"Then there is the follow-up content. There is an adventurer who has materials and wants to blackmail the protagonist. He is told off by the protagonist and slaps the table in anger. He wants to force the sale (you can write that the smart person next to him is thoughtful and guessed the identity of the protagonist's profession) to the protagonist. The protagonist releases the sense of oppression and uses spells to intimidate the adventurer and buy it at a low price.”

"interesting."

Q version Vic was obviously excited.

"The adventurer wanted to blackmail the protagonist but was counterattacked. It was quite dramatic."

"Sean's intelligence, wit and strong strength are fully demonstrated, and the guesses of Sean's identity by the smart people around him also add to the fun of the story."

"Of course, you can also write more details when Sean releases oppression and spell intimidation, such as writing more about Sean's expression, tone and spell effects, so that high-dimensional observers can feel the protagonist's strength more."

"After the acquisition (one seven-leaf white flower, 1 gold coin), the protagonist waited for a while, and wanted to leave after feeling that there was no more gain. A group of people came and had a secret conversation with the protagonist, telling him that there were dozens of seven-leaf white flowers, but because of the road The monster came to ask for help and was willing to give the protagonist half of the harvest after the task was completed, and sell the rest to the protagonist at a low price. The protagonist would take a lie detector test and join after passing the test. "

"The plot twist is very clever. "

"From acquiring a material to learning that there are more materials but it requires taking risks, the ups and downs of the plot are very attractive. The protagonist's caution is also fully demonstrated through the act of lie detection. "

"However, the description of the group of people coming and talking in secret can be more detailed, such as their expressions, tone and reasons, so that high-dimensional observers can better understand why the protagonist joined. "